First Edit - Bands

[critical mass]

Hi beaufort

I think you need a metaphor for the two of you at the table.
you go from clock, to song, to feelings to dead green leaves.


I like
I rise to gather plates.
It sets up looking out the window.
at least I believe you are looking out the window because you have plates in your hands. Maybe use music as a metaphor for the two of you since you use it for the Geese.

good luck

David