Ripples Novel Chapter 5--Revision 3

[ChristopherSea]

Excellent suggestions Chris!

I'm taking some time off from new chapters to clarify content, increase the show vs tell ratio, and general edits. I incorporated many of your suggestions into this one. I'm not bumping the other threads just altering them.

Thanks again.

Todd, I am delighted that I can help in any way! Although rather behind, I will definitely stay with this serial. I am even more lagging with milo's merlin series. However, I am not so certain that I am contributing as much to his editing. Nonetheless, I shall try to persevere with both, as well as with poetry posts. I hope the Holidays went well for you and yours./Chris