Glaciated uplands

[Leanne]

Edit 1 (tectac, beaufort)

We pull our clobber from the boot,
shod with cleats and rain-proof macs -- needs end-line punctuation -- a comma should do
sauna in the morning flask.
Gated steps then onto copse, -- are the gated steps a stile? Otherwise it sounds like there's a bit of a climb involved, which is not really the idea I have in my head (although my head is often wrong). If it's just a stile, I would have "on to" (as in "onwards to" rather than "onto" (as in "up onto")
slurry tanks and cattle troughs.

Sliding signs of glacier sheets,
grinding teeth crunch frozen rocks,
an apple bite arête
sinks deep inside the corrie, -- this is gorgeous imagery
whilst ribbons fill in flurries. -- lovely pickup on the end sounds here

Mud slips ragged as mountains run -- maybe punctuate here, unless you want "mountains run drumlins" which I'm not sure makes sense
drumlins smooth as fresh laid eggs.
Moss filled pillows and bracken beds, -- moss-filled
fauna threads through limestone walls,
Poo sticks raced down waterfalls. -- poo sticks eh? Well, that image certainly adds a bit of contrast

The wind sits down to catch a breath, -- I actually find the personification quite heavy-handed here, to the point where it might be a bit trite. I can't picture the wind with a bum. I'm good with the wind catching its breath (although some would say the wind is breath, but...)
cake and lake unfolded foil.
Beaufort scales the treetops sway -- this syntax is really odd, and what on the Beaufort scale? A 1-3 might sway those treetops, but a 9 is going to break them off
as wing and leaf are carried astray.
Copper confetti twists amber gold,
our trysting place enfolds,
furnished in field maple leaf.

Some genuinely lovely images here, but it actually feels like two different poems jammed together. I'd suggest weaving the "trysting place" idea through the first part a bit more, as just now it kind of reads more like a children's family adventure. Otherwise, I'd leave it out of the second part entirely.