Freedom

[tigrflye]

Bound not by shackles of this world
But of sacrifices by martyrs
I wish there was a Subject. Or punctuation. Bound not by shackles? Ok. Im assuming you are bound by something. What is it? "Of sacrifices by martyrs" what? Maybe " Because of sacrifices by martyrs"
A right many have lost misplaced? What rights? Maybe those rights were taken. Forcefully! Hence the need for martyrs
A gift some were given
To walk among the sunset
To live the dreams of this world
dare desire to silent my dreams the only line that doesn't start capitalized. ? Silence?
I too shall become a martyr meh


Poem
by Ruagun

"Bound" bothers me. We have freedom because a select few were willing to sacrifice. Because some people dream to walk in the sunset and that shouldn't be lost. You want to be a martyr too.
That is what I take from this. If that was your intention, done. I think it could be more powerful - who can't walk among the sunset? Why? Tell me why it is important for you to sacrifice for this right.
just thoughts,
Jenn