Entropy

[Truerenigma]

You only gave me half an edit! hahaha

Bub is a bugs bunny reference. Maybe "doc" would be better?

The repetition on "my brother" must've been a mistaken thought that "brother, my brother" is a common emphatic structure.

Lastly, I'm not familiar with the no-caps school of thought. I'll research the standard practice here in the States, but I'll lowercase on this forum from here on out.

After-lastly, the feedback, here, is non-suggestive. That is, there's nothing for me to work with in "what's with the X?" I'm happy to follow a guide, but there's no guide here, just a take-that kind of critique.

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I googled "brother, my brother," and it is certainly a common emphatic structure.

/my/ feedback is often non-suggestive (aside from mentioning cuts and line breaks) and contrary to what it appears; the real reason for that is because I'm not one to presume that the author cannot come up with something better on their own.

Common structure or not, poetry does not strive to be common: you want an economy of words—say little, mean much.