12-16-2013, 07:08 PM
(12-16-2013, 04:01 PM)billy Wrote: without out the title it wouldn't make much sense so it works in that respect.doesn't it mess up the iambic tetrameter ?
i like that you slightly changed the last line but you left it half a foot short (i think)
a good effort.
and now we're going to discuss it instead of the poem just forget i said anything
