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(12-15-2013, 03:19 AM)rowens Wrote:  My head is like a snowstorm, what more can i say

i or I? You can say i if you're down on your luck and feel that way, but if there's no relevance in the difference you can be consistent.


Days go by as chickens fly, the sky seems not so grey
The world I think and the world I live are two and seperate thoughts

Separate is infamously spelled with an a after the p.


I seek and look and find and a nook that seems like what I sought

and a nook?


I find myself in plain delight though plain this life can be

There is a time for awkwardness.


Look through my lens, my eyes, my friend and see whats truly free

what's, unless of course . . .


Some crazy thoughts, I think a lot through time and time again
Then find my rest so I invest in words and ink and pen


This poem says a lot to me. It doesn't say it good enough is all. I agree with everything, even your mistakes. But they remain mistakes, and the poem feels sloppy. A few minor changes and you might have something worthy and still not good enough. Keep working and you might pull through.
Editted for grammer and flow.
Wrote this in high school, about 7 years ago now, it's meant to be rough.
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We get to come back. - by Cyferz - 12-15-2013, 12:30 AM
RE: We get to come back. - by rowens - 12-15-2013, 03:19 AM
RE: We get to come back. - by Cyferz - 12-15-2013, 05:51 PM
RE: We get to come back. - by shejustwantstheworld - 12-15-2013, 11:52 AM



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