Clown Crown, the second half of Rube Barb

[tectak]

Crow-
first off, I def. like this poem, and trueenigma IMO was way to hard (no offense)
sending it to patch adams is pretty weird, but hey, im not here to judge you, only your poetry
Grieving uncynically for the vulnerable belief,
Weaving
Scenes of soldierly transcendence, is my fav. part has a beautiful rhythm

I actually really like your line breaks, and it creates an unique rhythm

This is not acceptable critique in this forum and would be considered of little value in ANY forum. You have made an attempt and that is to the good but your opening comment is valueless.
Be aware.