12-15-2013, 09:51 AM
This is a wonderful write, but I have to admit the title confounds me. Do you mean you are saying to the reader that the secret to life is dying...or is the secret (whatever it is) is dying? Perhaps you want the reader to take what they will, but I am thick and didn;t really get it.
As to the poem itself: I loved your word choices, the images, the enjambment, and the over all theme, but the scant punctuation (which I know is intentional) made it a bit awkward as a reader ( or at least this reader)
Perhaps I just don't know you voice well enough. Don't get me wrong, I loved the poem---these are just thoughts in my head.
mel.
As to the poem itself: I loved your word choices, the images, the enjambment, and the over all theme, but the scant punctuation (which I know is intentional) made it a bit awkward as a reader ( or at least this reader)
Perhaps I just don't know you voice well enough. Don't get me wrong, I loved the poem---these are just thoughts in my head.
mel.