Ellajam on "Dog in a Box" by trueenigma

[Truerenigma]

Hi, true, I enjoyed the image here and the breaks are beautiful. There are some weak spots but I think the core is good. Here are a few notes.

The grip that holds too tight is not so powerful— this line smelled a bit like "if you love it set it free"not a good start for me
it is the leash that leaves a little slack, then this, beautifully said, sweet rhymes
choke collar and a snack, that keeps control.
A steady diet could never bring me back,

I like the chilli in the can. This box I like the chili, a preference for it over homecooking says a lot about the home
is home. I have a family, and pets,
protect the pups from leering chicken hawks.
I make my annual visits to the vet. This line was off to me, you the dog or the owner of pets? It stopped me,

The leash still trails behind me by the chain
and its medallion, but I can't return. Great image
I've learned humility, and self-restraint,
are two things every dog has right to earn. I really don't get anything from the last two lines, and they don't seem to suit the poem

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Thanks again ellajam. I would like to mention that ellejam took it a step further on this one, and p.m.'ed me a number of helpful suggestions as they came to mind after the fact. Way to go the extra mile!