12-15-2013, 02:23 AM
I think personally I would go with "emptiness"--empty just makes you sound like you don't know what you are doing. You could emphasize it more by separating it with white space before and after. I'm one who loves to play with form (so I hate that it's impossible here) and I do like some of your choices....unfortunately when the words are tight they are almost impossible to read.
I also might rethink
the thought is too much....
show us why this is so overwhelming, go into detail. I find this refreshing except for those minor points.
Great job.
I also might rethink
the thought is too much....
show us why this is so overwhelming, go into detail. I find this refreshing except for those minor points.
Great job.