Boardwalks (edit #4.1)

[milo]

I have read through it another 10 times and I really like it. If you need to use pant, maybe try it instead of burst - not that I think one is better, just that it might make an interesting change. i don't think you need to add anything and your current lines are good. Did you record an audio?

Not of the last edit, I put it aside a bit. Burst/pant is interesting, maybe I'll record both ways, decide and call it a day. Thanks, milo.

post the audio HERE so I can hear it.