12-08-2013, 11:43 AM
the first line is solid, it means something, it has an image of something.
the second has an image but isn't as solid (in such a short poem all the wortds should count as much as possible) that hauled me skyward] or something more succinct.
the last two lines say a lot to say a little.
great effort
the second has an image but isn't as solid (in such a short poem all the wortds should count as much as possible) that hauled me skyward] or something more succinct.
the last two lines say a lot to say a little.
great effort
(12-05-2013, 12:27 PM)HalfOpenArms Wrote: You were the scaffolding
by which I hauled myself skyward.
If not for you,
I would have never seen the sun.