12-08-2013, 08:18 AM
the 2nd line makes it more senryu and you need a season word
the 1st version was also leaning more to senryu than haiku.
make it a slice of time not a slice of thought
An eclipse;
hollow reflections
of you
the 1st version was also leaning more to senryu than haiku.
make it a slice of time not a slice of thought
An eclipse;
hollow reflections
of you