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I really enjoyed this, though the last few lines kind of confused me a bit:
"Now I stand here, molted by a machine
and hoping it was good for them

It was good for me"

I kind of understand, but the confusion kind of made it a little difficult to connect with it.

This was my favorite part:
"These ones are quarter size, yellow, and they're dancin' through the air
in a tango, kung fu, copulatin' kinda way

The longer I watch, the less I remember being tied to earth by thoughts of
rising gas prices
widowed mother
looming nuclear war
imminent terrorist attack
terminated tumescence
next years drought
and such"
("Terminated tumescence" kind of threw me, but the rest of the noted lines were beautiful to me!)
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Spent - by Nick - 11-13-2013, 04:42 AM
RE: Spent - by justcloudy - 11-13-2013, 09:48 AM
RE: Spent - by Nick - 11-16-2013, 03:43 AM
RE: Spent - by ellajam - 11-13-2013, 10:21 AM
RE: Spent - by Graystar - 11-15-2013, 07:19 PM
RE: Spent - by justcloudy - 11-16-2013, 03:57 AM
RE: Spent - by tigrflye - 11-18-2013, 03:16 AM
RE: Spent - by Nick - 11-19-2013, 02:10 AM
RE: Spent - by 71degrees - 11-20-2013, 10:09 AM
RE: Spent - by Nick - 11-23-2013, 05:08 AM
RE: Spent - by Simatong - 12-07-2013, 06:44 PM



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