Struck By Lightning

[ThePinsir]

Something is here, here beyond the veil of understanding. here 2x isn't necessary
It hides its face and yet with familiar voice calls out from the dark. a familiar voice

"Step forward, curious child, and embrace the unseen. Chase the mystery that beckons." this is interesting. is it God talking?

Into the abyss I run, until beams of light pierce the veil of shadows. I'd like to know more about this abyss, actually
What figure stands at the other side, a face unseen with voice so familiar? you already said the voice is familiar
Is it you who brings me here? Or do I run to you at my heart's own yearning? What is it that I search for in the world with no answer? idk. you tell me.

As I finally reach my destination, I see but a mirror with a smiling reflection, and the search ends. I have found myself; I am the answer that I seek. ok, cool. a journey of self-discovery? those are fun

I kind of like what you have going here. Mystery and ambiguity can be fun. I think it needs a lot of work though. First, start with the line breaks. For a poem like this, try about 10 syllables per line, and maybe try adding some meter. I like the trace bits of personification and think you may be able to develop those images a bit more.

Honestly, what I liked most is that this reminds me of Luke's cave on Degobah