12-06-2013, 09:35 AM
I am only online for a short time today but I can't leave without commenting on this. The concept is beautiful. I enjoy that tongue-in-cheek tone in conjunction with a discussion on classical music, it makes an interesting juxtaposition.
I'm not convinced that you need "and" to start with. "plus" is odd also -- perhaps you'd consider either just "and" or "with". Additionally, "tapping a scuffed shoe" kind of gives me the image of some massive communal shoe... "tapping scuffed shoes" might work, although I understand you're going for the tapping of just one foot (for each person!)
Thanks very much for the read, this is great.
I'm not convinced that you need "and" to start with. "plus" is odd also -- perhaps you'd consider either just "and" or "with". Additionally, "tapping a scuffed shoe" kind of gives me the image of some massive communal shoe... "tapping scuffed shoes" might work, although I understand you're going for the tapping of just one foot (for each person!)
Thanks very much for the read, this is great.
It could be worse