Why Delay? (a short poem)
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I like this poem especially the first 2 lines. The second two are strong too but a little sad (which is what I assume you were going for). In the second line would you consider "a journey met with solitude"? it sounds smoother to me, and gives it a bit more despair.
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Why Delay? (a short poem) - by alatos - 11-23-2013, 02:25 AM
RE: Why Delay? (a short poem) - by Charlesjoseph - 11-23-2013, 09:53 PM
RE: Why Delay? (a short poem) - by Mitya - 11-25-2013, 11:24 AM
RE: Why Delay? (a short poem) - by alatos - 11-26-2013, 05:10 AM
RE: Why Delay? (a short poem) - by tomoffing - 11-26-2013, 08:20 AM
RE: Why Delay? (a short poem) - by Mikeodial - 11-27-2013, 09:58 PM
RE: Why Delay? (a short poem) - by gilmored - 12-05-2013, 12:07 PM
RE: Why Delay? (a short poem) - by Simatong - 12-05-2013, 06:15 PM



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