To: All the Girls

[ThePinsir]

To all the girls
Tight skinned
Primed; ripe and ready
Teeth: white
Straight eyed
We equal, yet I find you more than me equal how? Also, this is kind of a contradiction
Everywhere, dazzling
Twinkling, before me
Whatever will we do, when the gazes fade?
Like yesterdays headliner, damp, tattered on the pavement
All the strife and worry put upon the ripe fruit interesting image. i think you can play witht he ripe fruit image more
Hands anticipating with mouths open, ready for the reaping I wonder what her mouth is open for
Only and always to fall, rolling down the hill i really like this line
Forgot and left to rot
So to all the girls
Primped and pearly
Pure; picked and open I don't get the semicolon...
Skin: soft and naked
Eyes: wrought and sunken
Never mind the world or the hopes it beholds
Your fire: volcanic and teeming
Since birth and oblivion
Time will show the cracks and burns I hope you brought Burn Heal!
And the dysmorphic body turns what even is this o.O

I think your capitalization and punctuation can use a lot of work.

Besides that, your structure was very original. Me gusta. You have some strong metaphors. If you develop them a bit more I think you can really have something nice!