Animal or Vegetable?

[ChristopherSea]

Tectak edit 1

Animal or Vegetable?

Some vegans vomit fiddleheads
fanatically brandishing
their tightly coiled lime fists;
often sparring to uppercut
those masticating carnivores
of domestic fowl and beast.

I must confess, I do eat meat,
like my fellow Hominids,
as my ancient ancestors did.
I have no gun nor zeal to hunt;
don’t paint still life on butcher blocks.

I render our earth, both flora
and fauna, on cotton rag
paper in watercolor,
not upon calfskin vellum
nor with red-sable brushes.

Being human affords us choice
in committing those actions
that all humans do. Some pointing
fingers have murdered as well,
albeit a human fetus or two.


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Animal or Vegetable?

Some vegans vomit fiddleheads
emphatically brandishing
their coiled lime fists;
often sparring to uppercut
those masticating ominvores
of domestic fowl
and beast.

I must confess, I do eat meat,
like my fellow Hominids,
as my ancient ancestors did.
I've no gun or zeal to hunt;
I don’t paint still life
on butcher blocks.
I render our earth, both flora and fauna,
on cotton rag in watercolor,
not calfskin vellum
with sable brushes.

Being human
affords us choice
in committing those acts
that humans do.
Some pointing fingers
have murdered still,
albeit a human fetus
or two.

Yes chris. Good work. Still think the last stanza is a pity because it is so much "better" than the rest
Best,
tectak

Well, it's good to end strong! However, I feel the opening and intervening stanzas are potent too. Initially, you said the same of the first line. Nonetheless, I am up for suggestions for further editing.