Ripples Novel Chapter 11-Revision 2

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Chapter 11

With that unnatural grace, Ben stood. Darkness began to stream into the room and coalesce under his feet. Reaching down he touched the tip of his finger into the pool, and from that point it began to crawl over his body in tiny tendrils.
Memory began to turn, and then stopped to focus on Tyler. “Speaker, how is it that you are here? This is most irregular. Do you seek to undo what has already happened?”
- cut a "began"

"mad smile" - I've been tossing it around. It grew on me. The two words challenge each other so it is harder for me to imagine than something like "twisted smile".

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The story is interesting.
Can't find much to complain about.
Jenn