Danger Men at Work

Danger Men at Work

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12-03-2013, 09:28 PM

Void is such an overused "poetic" word, what about cavity?

I really like the edit though. The small changes you've made are very effective.

Best,

Todd

The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson

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Danger Men at Work - by tigrflye - 12-02-2013, 08:18 AM

RE: Danger Men at Work - by tectak - 12-02-2013, 05:42 PM

RE: Danger Men at Work - by tigrflye - 12-02-2013, 10:18 PM

RE: Danger Men at Work - by Todd - 12-03-2013, 09:28 PM

RE: Danger Men at Work - by tigrflye - 12-05-2013, 09:43 AM

RE: Danger Men at Work - by ellajam - 12-05-2013, 10:00 AM

RE: Danger Men at Work - by Todd - 12-05-2013, 10:20 AM

RE: Danger Men at Work - by tigrflye - 12-05-2013, 10:35 AM

RE: Danger Men at Work - by milo - 12-05-2013, 11:05 AM

RE: Danger Men at Work - by crow - 12-06-2013, 10:00 AM

RE: Danger Men at Work - by Todd - 12-07-2013, 04:14 AM

RE: Danger Men at Work - by No1wouldriotforless - 12-07-2013, 09:20 AM

RE: Danger Men at Work - by Leptir - 12-13-2013, 08:18 AM

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