12-02-2013, 10:18 PM
Tectak,
Thanks - I debated over sympathy/empathy. You solved that.
"Did you then wait WITHOUT hope? " - mmm yes
Trying to massage your heart back to life - maybe break on massage would help?
I appreciate the crit. I know it isn't a "like" poem. It is a story I wanted to tell and I haven't really written free verse so I am very thankful for the help.
-Jenn
Thanks - I debated over sympathy/empathy. You solved that.
"Did you then wait WITHOUT hope? " - mmm yes
Trying to massage your heart back to life - maybe break on massage would help?
I appreciate the crit. I know it isn't a "like" poem. It is a story I wanted to tell and I haven't really written free verse so I am very thankful for the help.
-Jenn