12-01-2013, 06:26 AM
"ashes changed to became blood, " - typo. "become"
Another exciting chapter, Todd. Thanks for sharing it.
It is my opinion that "Speaker" and "Thought" should be capitalized since they are used in place of names. It seems like you did in a some places.
"Hello speaker,” - how about here?
"Do not say names here, speaker,” the man said - and here?
I appreciate Tyler's concern for Ally in this chapter.
I am also very curious about what name Tyler was going to call Thought. (Before he was cut off) Hu-..
I hope I didn't miss something in an earlier chapter
Another exciting chapter, Todd. Thanks for sharing it.
It is my opinion that "Speaker" and "Thought" should be capitalized since they are used in place of names. It seems like you did in a some places.
"Hello speaker,” - how about here?
"Do not say names here, speaker,” the man said - and here?
I appreciate Tyler's concern for Ally in this chapter.
I am also very curious about what name Tyler was going to call Thought. (Before he was cut off) Hu-..
I hope I didn't miss something in an earlier chapter