12-01-2013, 02:40 AM
"Replay the barks that broke dawn's hush,"
Because I'm a poet rather than a scholar of poetry, I don't know how to teach someone to grasp a sense of cadence: when it works and when it doesn't.
Here, the rhythm falters by one beat, or semi-beat. Had you written:
"Play the barks that broke dawn's hush,"
...all would be well. But the "Re-" sets it akimbo.
You might check out Stephen Fry's "The Ode Less Travelled" for a lively discussion of rhythm, meter and and so forth.
Lance
Because I'm a poet rather than a scholar of poetry, I don't know how to teach someone to grasp a sense of cadence: when it works and when it doesn't.
Here, the rhythm falters by one beat, or semi-beat. Had you written:
"Play the barks that broke dawn's hush,"
...all would be well. But the "Re-" sets it akimbo.
You might check out Stephen Fry's "The Ode Less Travelled" for a lively discussion of rhythm, meter and and so forth.
Lance