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Weight, edit 2
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11-29-2013, 08:23 AM
The speaker is a woman reliving the days after her little sister died, when they were both young. That's why it's a bit piecemeal, but awkward isn't good.
Thanks for your thoughts, maybe I should go for a drastic restructure. I'll think on it. -justcloudy
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Weight, edit 2 - by justcloudy - 11-28-2013, 03:07 AM
RE: Weight, edit 2 - by rowens - 11-28-2013, 06:19 AM
RE: Weight, edit 2 - by ChristopherSea - 11-28-2013, 09:12 AM
RE: Weight, edit 2 - by justcloudy - 11-29-2013, 05:36 AM
RE: Weight, edit 2 - by rowens - 11-29-2013, 07:01 AM
RE: Weight, edit 2 - by justcloudy - 11-29-2013, 08:23 AM
RE: Weight, edit 2 - by ellajam - 11-29-2013, 10:15 PM
RE: Weight, edit 2 - by justcloudy - 11-30-2013, 02:57 AM
RE: Weight, edit 2 - by beaufort - 12-01-2013, 02:12 AM
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