Ripples Novel Chapter 3--Revision 3

[Todd]

Yeah, cloudy awesome comments.

Let me think about them some.

*Introduce the supernatural: ease or shock. Point taken, I'll think about it and reread this some.

* dialogue and paragraphs--biggest issue to address probably. Requiring more thought. Definitely address on edit.

*Timing--I'll see if I can fix the loose and fast feel of it, and ground it more.

*I'll consider the Pet Sematary note.

*Ally being more mad: Good point. I don't think that she'd be entirely mad over this though if you blend it with their last encounter we probably need to ease into some damage control.

* Friends: It's possible I'm playing to the trope. I've been in that situation before so it doesn't seem so odd to me, but I'll think of ways to mix it up some. If I can without introducing too many characters too fast. I have one idea I think I may include later, but take your point.

All in all good read, I appreciate the clarifications. Let me see what I come up with, and here's the key word eventually

But, I do intend to address many of things you've raised in some way.

Thanks,

Todd