Disposable

[ChristopherSea]

I really liked this piece. The short couplet stanzas create a sense of brevity and matter-of-factness, which I think complements the content of the poem. The images presented in each stanza are painful to the point where even the author can only bear to spend a few words on them!
The poem has a nice meter to it, though I would like the very last stanza to have more impact. I didn't really understand what you were trying to say, and you might consider breaking the rhythm all together because it could help set those two very important lines apart from the rest of the work. Thematically, this poem reveals a dark truth about human nature which is little discussed. I appreciated the bluntness and lyrical harmony of this poem.

Thank you very much for taking the time to read the poem and sharing your impressions of the piece ellz. I am glad you were moved and enjoyed the style.

The closing stanza takes a bit of thinking to gather meaning, but I believe it maybe worth the effort. The first line: 'Things are best thrown out than their story told' implies that we (or this narrator) would rather throw out certain things than be reminded of them. The second line: 'hope can recycle within truth’s withhold' suggests that we can maintain hope for the human race if we are not constantly reminded of the bad things or ignore them. I like the irony and paradox that throwing out something is still a form of recycling, which is a contradiction for garbage recycling. If we embrace misery (keep recycling it) than hopelessness will flourish. However, if we realize that there is misery, but then toss it out with the trash and forget about it, there is a chance for hope to be recycled within us, where there was once a sense of hopelessness.

I do realize that 'truth's withhold' implies lying to ourselves, but if it works why not? For the narrator within the poem it is survival. Nonetheless, I like the idea of trying to work on an alternate close that does not suggest that we must lie to ourselves to have hope. Perhaps I will try for a version more cheery version as well. Thanks again, Cheers!/Chris