Primal (new poem, Edit 3)

[milo]

Further notes: as far as headstone symbols, columns represent a noble life, and broken columns represent an early death.

Yah, maybe, but how is that related to /this/ poem. Seems like a red herring to me. Have we considered what metrically moving the caesura from before crumbling to before columns accomplishes? I feel it moves the emphasis from the crumbling to the column.