"Way back when"

[Glittercake]

I love this. It gives me a real view of hard work and determination with a feeling something is owed to them. The only thing I see that's improvable is the grammatical sense there are no commas or periods at the end of any stanzas and then there is one at the last. I think you should make a defined ending at the end of each stanza. But thanks for the great read and imagery