11-23-2013, 11:59 PM
Chazz, I appreciate the comments. Yeah, this is all extremely rough draft. I'm trying mostly to keep the momentum. I'm only doing minor edits and shifts now. I expect to do the heavy lifting in the edit. I'll take and appreciate any feedback you leave. If something doesn't work or you don't like something please say so. I will be cutting 10% no matter what. Mostly I'm trying in this run to get the bones of the story. Later revisions will probably be significantly altered.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson