Why Delay? (a short poem)

[Charlesjoseph]

Why Delay?

This road I walk is mine alone, though countless trudge beside;
a journey set through solitude, though millions match my stride.
I gaze ahead; I feel my breath, and cry along the way.
For every step, one less to death --- I wonder: why delay?


Why Delay?

This road I walk is mine alone,
though countless trudge beside,
a journey set through solitude, ---------------------------------(I'm not sure about "set through" maybe you can come up with one word that means the same thing. it works but it stuck out to me)
though millions match my stride.

I gaze ahead I feel my breath,
and cry along the way. --------- --------------------------------( you can come up with a better line that says the same thing it will make this stronger)
With every step, one less to death --------------------------------------(with works here)
I wonder, "why delay?"

Hey there,
I am in no way trying to rewrite your poem I just wanted to show you another way to break your lines. This seems cleaner to me. Also I think your title could be stronger but thats up to you. With that said, I like your poem, i think it needs some adjustment hope this gave you a few ideas.
Cheers
Chazz