Primal (new poem, Edit 3)

[heslopian]

The funeral was meant literally, the bridge was intended as metaphor. Do you think this relationship needs more clarification in the poem? I was trying to suggest that an important person for the narrator had died (possibly a family member); the stability of our own life (the bridge) is dependent on the lifes of the ones we love (the supports). And like a bridge collapsing, death always seems to come in waves... When everybody's gone, people often collapse quickly themselves.

Ah, see, because of the earlier connection with trains and a house from which the narrator could see them, I assumed that the bridge was literal, and that the trains passed under it. Maybe you could describe the bridge as "proverbial"? That adjective might be a bit long, though...