Primal (new poem, Edit 3)
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(11-19-2013, 11:17 PM)jdvanwijk Wrote:  Edit 2 (Heslopian, milo, trueenigma, beaufort)
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Primal

Our guest room shook violently
every ten minutes or so.
It was small, but treasured: my brother
and I spent hours howling
at the trains crashing by.

A funeral today, another
support of the bridge down.
And like a ghost, I appeared
I thought I mentioned it as a comment on the first one, but looking through, i see i didn't. you have some tense confusion going on here.
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Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by jdvanwijk - 11-19-2013, 11:17 PM
RE: Primal (new poem) - by heslopian - 11-20-2013, 12:05 AM
RE: Primal (new poem) - by jdvanwijk - 11-20-2013, 04:22 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 2 ) - by heslopian - 11-23-2013, 12:54 PM
RE: Primal (new poem) - by SkaaDee - 11-20-2013, 12:14 PM
RE: Primal (new poem) - by jdvanwijk - 11-20-2013, 05:13 PM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 1) - by milo - 11-21-2013, 08:39 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 1) - by jdvanwijk - 11-21-2013, 10:29 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 1) - by trueenigma - 11-21-2013, 10:19 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 1) - by jdvanwijk - 11-21-2013, 04:09 PM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 1) - by beaufort - 11-21-2013, 09:03 PM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 2 ) - by jdvanwijk - 11-22-2013, 06:15 PM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 2 ) - by milo - 11-23-2013, 08:38 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 2 ) - by jdvanwijk - 11-23-2013, 09:35 PM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 2 ) - by milo - 11-24-2013, 03:17 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 2 ) - by jdvanwijk - 11-24-2013, 04:50 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by milo - 11-24-2013, 05:27 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by jdvanwijk - 11-24-2013, 06:19 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by jdvanwijk - 11-24-2013, 06:43 PM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by milo - 11-25-2013, 02:07 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by trueenigma - 11-25-2013, 01:18 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by jdvanwijk - 11-25-2013, 02:01 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by Charlesjoseph - 11-25-2013, 02:46 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by jdvanwijk - 11-25-2013, 03:13 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by trueenigma - 11-25-2013, 03:37 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by milo - 11-25-2013, 03:48 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by trueenigma - 11-25-2013, 03:55 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by milo - 11-25-2013, 03:58 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by trueenigma - 11-25-2013, 05:29 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by milo - 11-25-2013, 05:47 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by trueenigma - 11-25-2013, 05:56 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by jdvanwijk - 11-25-2013, 04:16 PM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by jdvanwijk - 11-29-2013, 06:42 PM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by LanceRocks - 11-30-2013, 12:17 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by jdvanwijk - 11-30-2013, 06:57 PM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by LanceRocks - 12-01-2013, 01:21 PM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by jdvanwijk - 12-01-2013, 07:50 PM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by LanceRocks - 12-01-2013, 11:49 PM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by Todd - 12-02-2013, 02:48 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by LanceRocks - 12-02-2013, 03:07 AM
RE: Primal (new poem, Edit 3) - by Todd - 12-02-2013, 03:09 AM



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