Ice Aged

[ChristopherSea]

Much obliged for your time and suggestions for this one AJ! Your interpretations are spot on, as are your ideas for editting! The birth of this poem stemsfrom my fascination with the geological and cryopreservation properties of glaciers, the fact that entire intact mammoths have been found in them. Remember, the discovery of the iceman? His tattoos, herbal medicine pouch, jewelry, all amazing finds! As for the title, I changed it a few times (not entirely happy with any). I liked 'Ice Aged', but then I thought of the Disney cartoon. I tried to avoid using glacier upfront too. Additonally, I had the same problem with 'yet' as you did. I tried a half a dozen different things and circled through them twice. I settled on 'yet' because even though glaciers appear to flow unobtrusively, there is quite a bit of impact from their crawl! Perhaps going back to just a semicolon as: '...unobtrusively; Cro-Magnonc dreams...' I love your idea for the drumlin; great extra purposing and drama in those burial mounds! Bear is too carry, but all the multiple entendre is great, especially if read outloud and not seeing the spelling. You may be right about combining exhale, deliquesces, ancient, secrets delicacies in a single sentence. I had two lines there before and I can reexamine the wording. I will compose an edit soon. Please do come back to critique the changes or with any other ideas. Thank you so much AJ! Have a nice weekend./Chris