11-21-2013, 12:02 PM
[quote='Todd' pid='147739' dateline='1384960971']
Talk about an edit improving a poem.
I'll have to read this a few more times before I'm ready to comment more, but first impressions: I love what you did here, Chazz.
Hey Todd,
Thanks for liking the edit i think it still needs some screws tightened let me know if anything sticks out to you.
thanks as always,
Chazz
Hey Tectak,
Thanks for the kind words and the kick in the ass. I'm pretty happy with where this ended up and although it still needs a few tweeks it was a good way to change up my writing style and reboot my thinking pattern.
cheers,
Chazz
Talk about an edit improving a poem.
I'll have to read this a few more times before I'm ready to comment more, but first impressions: I love what you did here, Chazz.
Hey Todd,
Thanks for liking the edit i think it still needs some screws tightened let me know if anything sticks out to you.
thanks as always,
Chazz
Hey Tectak,
Thanks for the kind words and the kick in the ass. I'm pretty happy with where this ended up and although it still needs a few tweeks it was a good way to change up my writing style and reboot my thinking pattern.
cheers,
Chazz