Three Voices at a Burning

[ChristopherSea]

Heslopian, I really like this idea of three distinct voices at a witch burning. I think the choices of the 'religious zealot', 'pervert' and 'murderer' are intriguing as well. I felt that the first one was the most successful. I may have ended it with the penultimate line ('at God') within that stanza. Where it goes a bit too far perhaps is with the next two utterings, where both are in strong dialects. Each one additionally makes use of parenthetical thought and both are killers. I do understand that neither could vocalize those streams of the mind, but maybe choose just one for that particular treatment and covey the other one's hidden agenda out loud in their spoken voice somehow. Some other ideas could be to raise the social status, and concomitant diction of the lecherous one (then you have only one strong dialect). He could go on about the waste of a good piece of ass, etc. The raving repentant dialog is too difficult to read. You could rewrite it thusly: O-GOD-HEAR-ME-NOW-I-REPENT or something along those lines. Some things to consider for your next edit. See what you think. Cheers/Chris