A Look at Cupid

[Polar Bear]

Hello! I thoroughly enjoyed this sonnet, and feel disqualified to critique, being new both here and to writing in general, but I did however have one hitch reading, and that was the full stop on line 10. It just didn't flow good to my ear. However, the full stop on line 13 had great rhythm when combined with the last line of the couplet.

Take this with a grain of salt; I'm not versed well!

Thanks for the experience!

In all my circling wondering,
I dared a glimpse of who we'd be,
my foolish Psyche hungering
for all the things she shouldn't see.
A flash-bulb quick epiphany,
you loved the very heart of me
like children do in summer's sweet
humidity and though that heat
was only dreamt, I felt the eletricity
inside my skin. So everyday - This full stop derailed my rhythm a bit.
I mourn your carnal spark and weigh
my longing for a rare simplicity
like love. You felt it too, I know, - the couplet, however, was scrumptious to read!
we glimpsed it one time years ago.