Coup Détente

[ChristopherSea]

lucent edit 1 Thanks!
Hi chris,
Gardening World again, yes?
Bloody crabgrass (we call it Digitaria, we mycologists...or just poacea!)
Anthropods still throws me, though.)
All will come clear...maybe.
Best,
tectak

Coup Détente

In defiant opposition
to our lean blades I want it to be "keen" blades because Pratensis has no claim to lean-ness that I can get immediately. Does it matter? Perhaps not...there's more to come!
of Old Kentucky Blue,
centurion clonesComma. Surely.
donning gold helmsComma. Surely.
annexed our sun
and stormed en masse....but "..donning gold helms" is so good it makes "en masse" seem gallically bad.

Scuttling on their armored
arthropod legs, crabgrass [b]Nope. Just don't get it. The crab=anthropod but that's it. Where is this going? We are talking GRASS here, aren't we?So what scuttles?
took our main grounds
when water rations ran low.Nicely observed. Veracity verse.

Rebellious ivy ascended
our regime’s façade.Not sure about the use of "regime" here. Do regimes have walls? Metaphorically you may be in a rack. Can't help. Sorry
Ramparts were reclaimed;Comma only here. There is a strong sentence requirement staring at you. Why deny its existence?
festooned in dreadlocks. Look. It's good. OK? It is just a little to contrived now. I don't know how you could get out of it without napalm

Mum in our room,
having lost all our blooms,
we plot to reseed
another day.Hmmm. Well, it's certainly a twisted end. Mandrake to you!

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Coup Détente

In defiant opposition
to our lean blades
of Old Kentucky Blue,
centurion clones
donning gold helms
annexed our sun
and stormed en mass.

Scuttling on their armored
arthropod legs, crabgrass
took our main grounds
when water rations ran low.

Rebellious ivy ascended
our regime’s façade.
Ramparts were reclaimed;
festooned with their dreadlocks.

Mum in our rooms,
having lost all our blooms,
we plot to reseed another day.

Tom, thanks much. I love kean blades! Some good and obvious edits, but I don't see your problem with crabgrass. Crabs are crustaceans, crustaceans are arthropods and I can't think of a grass that looks more like the appendages of arthropods. Nonethless I shall take a look. They may well creep more than they scuttle, but I was trying to make use of the double entendre of movement and sabotoge. As always, much obliged for your all too logical and sage advice. Off to edit, by your leave, mon Capitan!