Accompany, revision of Walk With Me

[Todd]

The edit seems stronger Graystar. I'm going to continue to think about it. I want to careful that any comments I make at this point don't hinge solely on style differences that I may have from you. Your poem has a right to keep your style. The edit though is a step forward.

You may want to edit your first post and place this revision above your original so that people aren't confused as to which version they are commenting on.

Best,

Todd