Hunter S. Thompson

[Graystar]

Hunter s. Thompson truly chased the dragons tail,
While captaining a ship of madness powered by a cocaine sail.
He pulled up anchor and left behind sanity,
Try something that ties these two lines more smoothly:
In search of treasure he left behind sanity
finding the dark underbelly of humanity.
In search of his treasure, the dark underbelly of humanity.
Hunter sailed upon LSD wishes and mescaline dreams, I like this line
Only to find the world isn't quite as beautiful as it seems. This is blah
He took in the undesirable, he took in the bad,
He took in the undesirable and...say something stronger here like languished in the bad
He translated it all through his pen, and onto his pad. I like this
Hunter left us to soon, no more stories for him to make. Too
Forever sailing upon a limitless sea of booze,
Leaving only genius in his wake...Why genius? Would the reader draw this conclusion or agree?

Ahoy Ryan! Sorry, couldn't resist. I like much of this and like Tectak and CharlesJoseph said there are holes in it. I don't want to see it sink. There are several lines I liked a lot, L5 and L8, and others that could stand a tweak and be excellent too. Keep writing!