Boardwalks (edit #4.1)

[SirBrendan]

Drift along the shoreline's ghost
paths; count the feet that rutted Very clever use of line breaks. It might work better to say 'rut (line break) through'. It'll end the second line on a harsher sound and continue the poem's habit of a line being a statement within itself
the splintered gray slats, Through would replace 'the' here, which might help snap the repetition in these two lines. You could also then add a period here.
the bicycles pedaled Alternative: Bicycles pedal
as mornings' rolling light set fire Uh oh, you've mixed tenses here. Drift along is present whereas 'set fire' is past. It worked okay with rutted, but here there's no continuation of to make the same true here. Consider sets fire to fix this (and if so, some revision throughout the stanza to avoid awkwardness/conflict).
to the curves of early tides. Almost forgot to say, these lines are beautiful!

Hear the dogs' yap and pant Maybe this is just a dialect difference, but yap seems to be a very strange word. Nothing structurally wrong here except I'd maybe place a comma at the line break
bursting through their freedom run;
the murmur of old friends I'm starting to think you hate the word 'and'. :p Unfortunately to use the verb 'hear' from S2L1, you need an and because of the lack of relationship between dogs barking and murmuring aside from that shared verb
that fill long days as the horizon
glitters before them, reflected
in storefronts (now shuttered) behind. Again, a fantastic closer on the stanza

Absorb the empty spaces
where the lucky lived; buried
lawns scattered with debris
and what were memories
still wait (twelve months shredded)
for their autumn rakes. This stanza is just perfect for me. I love the parallels established throughout the entire poem structure. Thank you for the read


I'm not sure I'm settled on this. Any suggestions, particularly on punctuation changes, are of course welcomed. I keep adding the "the"s then cutting them again. Help please.