11-15-2013, 01:57 AM
Thanks, Chris, nicely done, smooth. 
I came to the parentheses because I liked the before them/behind them in S2. When I read your version I don't think the poem suffers from the loss of behind but I'm not sure.
I'm one of tectak's cases where a poem can be killed by punctuation, but that's only my own lack of skill. It's a thin line between creativity and insanity.
I came to the parentheses because I liked the before them/behind them in S2. When I read your version I don't think the poem suffers from the loss of behind but I'm not sure.
I'm one of tectak's cases where a poem can be killed by punctuation, but that's only my own lack of skill. It's a thin line between creativity and insanity.
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