Hunter S. Thompson

[Charlesjoseph]

Hunter s. Thompson truly chased the dragons tail, (your title tells us who this is about so you could possibly begin with the second line.)
While captaining a ship of madness powered by a cocaine sail.

He pulled up anchor and left behind sanity,
In search of his treasure, the dark underbelly of humanity.

Hunter sailed upon LSD wishes and mescaline dreams,
Only to find the world isn't quite as beautiful as it seems.

He took in the undesirable, he took in the bad, (both equate to the same thing)
He translated it all through his pen, and onto his pad.

Hunter left us to soon, no more stories for him to make.
Forever sailing upon a limitless sea of booze,

Leaving only genius in his wake...

Hey Ryan,
I see a lot of redundancy here. I feel like the rhyme scheme kinda boxed you in and you use a lot of descriptors. My advice is cut it back to the meat and watch the cliche's. Also, when you write lines that rhyme think of it in terms of music. Pick one of your favorite songs and listen to the beat. it's structured to keep time.
Ex. One and two and three and four. So if you write a line that goes (one and two and three. your next line should follow suit.)

Written example.

let's have fun
lets all run,

blah blah blah blah.
blah blah blah blah.

You can mix things up to suit you, but tight lines are more musical.

I like the subject matter of your poem and i hope you edit this cause i'm a mini fan. Where are the Guns? He loved his guns.
Be well
Chazz