11-13-2013, 11:53 AM
(11-13-2013, 11:46 AM)funkyplunk Wrote: The poem can be a little too wordy as times. Distracting the reader from your true intent of clipped fragments. Rewording is necessary in order for this poem to flow.This is not even close to the level of critique considered acceptable for this forum. Please read the forum rules. Then go back and actually read this poem and make comments using specifics from the poem itself to support what you are saying.
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