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Wet Knife (Revision)
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11-12-2013, 07:59 PM
I think this is beautiful Todd. It's simple and rather eloquent. I especially liked the sentence structure and the word play, effective! If you were to cut some unneeded words, it would add even more emphasis and leave a stronger impact. I'd have liked to have a stronger ending too.
Fair play to you man :-)
You'll find out who I am within the imagery, it pleads 'fuck the metaphors and scream'
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Wet Knife (Revision) - by Todd - 11-12-2013, 06:23 AM
RE: Wet Knife - by heslopian - 11-12-2013, 01:51 PM
RE: Wet Knife - by Todd - 11-12-2013, 07:57 PM
RE: Wet Knife - by Euan - 11-12-2013, 07:59 PM
RE: Wet Knife (Revision) - by Todd - 11-12-2013, 08:08 PM
RE: Wet Knife (Revision) - by Euan - 11-12-2013, 08:22 PM
RE: Wet Knife (Revision) - by Todd - 11-12-2013, 08:26 PM
RE: Wet Knife (Revision) - by Nick - 11-13-2013, 05:00 AM
RE: Wet Knife (Revision) - by ChristopherSea - 11-13-2013, 05:40 AM
RE: Wet Knife (Revision) - by Todd - 11-13-2013, 08:13 AM
RE: Wet Knife (Revision) - by Stephanie - 11-13-2013, 11:02 PM
RE: Wet Knife (Revision) - by Todd - 11-14-2013, 07:45 AM
RE: Wet Knife (Revision) - by Stephanie - 11-14-2013, 05:26 PM
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