11-12-2013, 03:41 PM
Love is a maze of truth - a comma is missing here
With all the dead ends..
We grew
All the hardships,
Pushing through
And in the end what I found
Was you. - you're just repeating your ending...
First you bit the heart off my sleeve. - nice imagery, a bit gory, still cool
And still we loved,
unreservedly.
We rushed, I tripped and fell - i love this line
Growing distant,
But on the same trail
In this maze searching for the truth, - lovely, showing the need to be together
and in the end
what I found
is you.
Love is a maze of truth - a comma is missing here
With all the dead ends..
We grew
All the hardships,
Pushing through
And in the end what I found
Was you. - you're just repeating your ending...
First you bit the heart off my sleeve. - nice imagery, a bit gory, still cool
And still we loved,
unreservedly.
We rushed, I tripped and fell - i love this line
Growing distant,
But on the same trail
In this maze searching for the truth, - lovely, showing the need to be together
and in the end
what I found
is you.
With all the dead ends..
We grew
All the hardships,
Pushing through
And in the end what I found
Was you. - you're just repeating your ending...
First you bit the heart off my sleeve. - nice imagery, a bit gory, still cool
And still we loved,
unreservedly.
We rushed, I tripped and fell - i love this line
Growing distant,
But on the same trail
In this maze searching for the truth, - lovely, showing the need to be together
and in the end
what I found
is you.
Love is a maze of truth - a comma is missing here
With all the dead ends..
We grew
All the hardships,
Pushing through
And in the end what I found
Was you. - you're just repeating your ending...
First you bit the heart off my sleeve. - nice imagery, a bit gory, still cool
And still we loved,
unreservedly.
We rushed, I tripped and fell - i love this line
Growing distant,
But on the same trail
In this maze searching for the truth, - lovely, showing the need to be together
and in the end
what I found
is you.