Aranea

[jdeirmend]

Updated in original post.

Alatos,

I enjoyed your exegesis a lot! I think it's good that you're reflecting on the meaning of your own writing like that. The trick, however, is to say all that in a way, in the poem, that makes it very hard for the reader to not come away with something similar. That I enjoyed the exegesis more than the poem shows me that the poem isn't quite there yet.

I would encourage you to keep digging with this one. Just my suggestion; take it for what it's worth, but I don't think you've mined your vision in full yet.

Incidentally, the craft-centered approach that most poets favor involves an obsessive amount of reflecting and re-writing. If this is a new idea to you, I hope you're not alarmed. And I assure you, it is a maddening sort of fun.