11-10-2013, 03:38 PM
(11-10-2013, 06:00 AM)Todd Wrote: Tired of red rosesI never got that violets are blue thing. They're violet, that's why they're called violets after all. And don't get me started on red roses.
and blue violets
If you expect me to compare myself
to a Summer's day, or feel
that love is in the air, then I am not
the poem for you.
I am the humidity that precedes Malaria,
influenza exploding into airborne Ebola,
rhythm without rhyme,
and the stolen fire of insight.
With me, you will finally understand why
a flower is lonely, and why you lie restless
beneath the moon. I will not be
your Russian nesting doll
for I will never lose myself in you,
though you may in me.
~~~
Good typo catch Jenn (they can sneak in no matter how much we read over these things.
I don't get the sickness you're trying to portray here. Maybe a little more grit and less humor?
But I'm biased.
My favorite line is the one with malaria. Well done.
I'll be there in a minute.

