Myosotis

[Todd]

Hi Chazz, much better. Here are some comments on the edit:

Myosotis (revision 1)

Child, when I saw you
I was afraid to touch you.--Optionally you could cut you, my hands, and the period
My hands unworthy of your innocence.

Fragile...Infant... Buddha!--Not a fan of the punctuation
Your atomic smile enough to silence the world.--Probably the most interesting line

Now, after all the flowers I remain.--still don't think you need now
The wreaths and sprays all discarded
In my thoughts one glorious forget-me-not.--in my thoughts could be replaced by to

I think there are still a lot of directions you could go with this. Those are simply my initial thoughts.

Best,

Todd